Username: I’m not keen on it, it didn’t catch my attention – actually it did so well at not being noticeable that I probably would have over-looked it… I’m sure you have your reasons for it though. (1/5)

Title: I’m presuming it comes with the template, simply because it says exactly the same thing… It isn’t particularly original, but it all matches – so I suppose that’s fine. (3/5)

First Sight: I like the darker colours, and the pink certainly stands out. The navigation seems quite clear, and on first impressions it seems like an okay design. Nothing really struck me with it – nothing bad, but nothing good… it all just seems very… ordinary. I don’t mean it offensively, it’s just how I see it. You have a cheeky design – but nothing is suggesting you have the personality to support it. However, Initially… Can’t complain too much as I can’t see anything that puts me off completely. (7/10)

Your Sacrifice: You really need to archive older entries, it just seems so cluttered… It’s the same template, which is fine – matches okay. You don’t update daily, and there seems to be no organization as to when you choose to add entry… (4/8)

Sparkling Diamond: Credit for your design goes to Sazzy Design . I haven’t actually seen your template before, so it was a bit different – which was nice. It had a cheeky quality, which made it look quite fun and appealing. I wasn’t sure if I found the design itself hugely appealing, but it was a nice idea – as I said before, it makes your diary look fun, upbeat and doesn’t put me off. Links are in pink down to the left side of the entry, all very clear and organised which was nice… I just wasn’t sure about the picture – it seemed a bit over the top for your diary in particular. I didn’t like the tag board in the slightest, it cluttered up the design and seemed to spoil the templates simplicity. Otherwise, all in all – I can’t complain too much, it wasn’t exactly to my style – but it certainly gave off a good impression. I can see why you chose it. The less cluttered the better in my opinion – and this design is a perfect example of why straight-forward designs are sometimes better. Ooh, and I loved the quote you have at the bottom of your entries… I’m not sure if it’s always been the same or if you changed it recently – but it’s good!! (20/25)

Guestbook: It doesn’t go with your main diary template. It’s blue, which is nice – but it just doesn’t match, and looks out of place… Seems to work fine, and looks simple enough though. (1/2)

Readability: Very clear. Font size, colour and face were all fine. (5/5)

The Love: I didn’t seem to approach your diary with a lot of positive comments, but I didn’t want that to effect what I actually thought about the content of your diary. I was hoping that perhaps with the lively design that your entries would match… Sadly, for me, they didn’t. I couldn’t really relate to what you were saying, your diary entries seemed a little young to me. At first I thought maybe they developed a bit – but I did try and read every entry, and just found myself dragging through them..

I’d consider breaking some entries up, for instance this entry, went on forever, and I couldn’t get into it just because I knew how much more was to go. Perhaps more paragraphs, or even splitting it into more entries… It just doesn’t entice people to keep reading if they think there is a novel to go.

Your entry when you mentioned September 11th was nice. It was full of emotion, and for once it didn’t overlook peoples feelings. Often people can be quite hurtful and say to just move on, but you seemed to manage to remember your thoughts and feelings without being offensive. I liked this entry quite a bit, it was nice to see this side to your writing, and also good to see you did broaden your subjects within your diary.

Obviously, a very powerful entry you wrote was this one . It was about the racism you’d faced, now I can’t relate to that (for obvious reasons) but it seemed to offend you a great deal what you’d been called (and rightly so) ... though it did seem a little dramatic. Perhaps things are different here in the UK, I’m not sure... But anyway, it was well written - even if I didn’t entirely relate to it. It was nice to see that you could express your feelings so well.

Overall I found it quite difficult to review your diary, just because I don’t think we had much in common, Your actual writing style is quite simplistic, but it does have a fun quality when you actually think about what you’re writing. Sometimes it doesn’t even seem like you’d be interested in reading back what you had written - you blurt things out and then never come back to them, which is fine it is your choice. To me, the language used just put me off from the start... but if that is you, then stay you. I can honestly say your personality did come through in quite a few entries - which was nice, and you aren’t afraid of expressing yourself. For someone going through similar things as you, with a similar background it would be a nice read – however, I really struggled, though I can see potential. (28/50)

Grammar: A lot of slang and spelling mistakes. They got on my nerves, and didn’t like it much at all. (4/10)

Glitter: There’s a few extras, to name a few… Cast, Pictures, 69 Facts (I liked this idea, it was a bit cheeky and fun and definitely went with your design). There was nothing that hugely jumped out at me… but it was all okay. Did I just not see a bio? Apologies if I missed it, if I didn’t and you just don’t have one – I’d seriously recommend you getting one. (9/15)

Extra Credit: Hmm… It’s difficult… There are an awful lot of pictures and I can’t work out if it’s because you just happened to have a lot and you put a lot of effort in, or if you really are just very very sure of yourself… However it’s deserving of a point just for the sheer amount of them. (Perhaps you can organise them better though, as some took up a huge amount of space… and anybody who doesn’t have a fast internet connection would get bored waiting.) (2/5)

Lasting Impression: Sorry, I’m not going to remember this diary. There was just nothing standing out – you had the perfect opportunity with that design to show yourself off as this cheeky fun person – but your diary entries just were a little bland. Though perhaps it was just a personality clash. (3/10)

Will I Come Back?: Not to read entries… but then I suppose you knew that -Though I might pop by to see if you get a Bio done. (4/10)

Total: 91/160

Number of Entries Read: Most of them, some I skim-read though.

Favorite Entry: This one .

Favorite Quote: “Im so tired of this. I cant do this anymore. Believing, not believing. Taking his word over everyone elses. I cant do it anymore. I cant be naiive. I need to wake up and realize everything isnt as it seems. Ive cried my last tears...”

Comments: I’m sorry about the low score, I’ve been told I’m harsh with scoring as it is. Perhaps it was just bad luck with the reviewer you got…